Thursday, September 26, 2013

New Before/After: Path Unchosen


This blurb is for Kim Cleary's book, Path Unchosen, the first in her Daughter of Ravenswood series. Here's what we came up with together. It's a little different than when I left it with Kim; she's put her own spin on the final product.

Before:
Some things make us stronger.

After growing up in an orphanage, eighteen year old Judy Hudson yearns for freedom. She is shocked to discover she is a witch, but willingly starts a journey of self discovery with Purah, her enchanting tutor. 

With growing horror Judy watches frightened townspeople burn a zombie victim, she decides to find who is raising the dead and stop them. She used to hide from conflict, but now- with the help of a ghost, an imp and a dragon - Judy has to uncover secrets to protect her independence. What she finds hardens her resolve to make new choices and take decisive action. 

It takes courage, commitment and extreme determination to find her place in the world, but in the end will it bring what she most craves?

After:
When eighteen-year-old Judy Hudson discovers she’s a necromancer and sees first-hand the pain her powers can cause the dead, she just wants to deny who she is. The zombie plague is long over. She wants to find a more normal life, but that's a challenge when a beautiful otherworldly man, who claims to be her guardian, saves her life.

Judy tries to set right the harm she inflicted on a spirit she raised, but new zombies attack—zombies raised from among the long-time dead. Someone else just like her is out there, and he's not trying to set anything right. To save her own life, and protect the innocent inhabitants of the nearby town who’ve become her friends, Judy has to figure out who’s raising the dead and why. She must also learn to control the darkness inside her—a seductive darkness that promises her power beyond her wildest dreams.
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Thursday, September 19, 2013

New Before/After: The Bear Marches West

This was a one-shot (one going-over rather than a back-and-forth) for Russell Phillips, a longtime client who specializes in ebooks primarily aimed at military gamers. I love working with Russ, we've got a pretty good rapport going.

Here we worked on an alternate history scenario called The Bear Marches West. You'll note the alternate spelling of colour; the gentleman is British.

Before:
The Bear Marches West contains 12 scenarios set during a fictional Warsaw Pact invasion of West Germany during the 1980s. All the scenarios are based on battles depicted in well-known novels, and are designed to be used with whatever rules the players are most comfortable with. Each scenario includes the battle's context, weather conditions, deployments, force lists and a colour map. The scenarios range in scale from small skirmishes, with a company on each side, to large engagements, with Soviet regiments bearing down on smaller but better-equipped NATO units.

After:
NATO kept the Warsaw Pact behind the Berlin Wall until its dissolution--but what if it hadn't?

The Bear Marches West contains 12 gaming scenarios set during a fictional Warsaw Pact invasion of West Germany in the 1980s. All the scenarios are based on battles depicted in well-known novels, and are designed to be used with whatever rules the players wish.

Each scenario includes the battle's context, weather conditions, deployments, force lists and a colour map. The scenarios range in scale from small skirmishes, with a company on each side, to large engagements, with Soviet regiments bearing down on smaller but better-equipped NATO units.


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