Tuesday, June 19, 2012

New before/after: A World Apart

Today's before/after is David Brown's A World Apart, the second book in the Elencheran Chronicles series. I also wrote the blurb for the first book, Fezariu's Ephiphany. Here's what we did together:

Before:
Demetrius, Elenya and Halcyon thought they'd be friends for life - but love easily gets in the way of friendship.  Misunderstandings, pride and childish folly see the trio split and Demetrius heading out into the world alone. 

Years later none of them have the lives they dreamed of. Halcyon has followed Elena into piracy, a life much more suited to her wild ways. Demetrius has fallen from grace: no longer a decorated soldier, he is forced to become a bounty hunter. Elena has embraced magic - but magic in Elenchera has a devasting price.

When Demetrius receives an assignment to track down Elenchera's most famous pirate, will love or duty rule his heart in the end?

After:
Demetrius makes his first mistake when he lets his best friend Halcyon marry Eleyna, the love of his life, without saying a word. On the day of the wedding, he walks away from the Elencheran town of Dove's Meadow and joins the army.

He makes his second mistake when the pirate Black Iris tricks him into letting dozens of men, women and children die in a fire. Demetrius is imprisoned in grief and disgrace.

But he can atone. The Black Iris is dead. The Ivory Rose has risen to the top of the pirates and is leading brutal raids on the coast. If Demetrius can capture and kill her, he'll win his pardon.

And then Demetrius discovers the Ivory Rose is Eleyna. He must decide which will be his third mistake: Losing his last chance at a pardon, or destroying the one woman he's ever loved.


I'd love to help you with your blurb!